Thursday, April 30, 2015

Revision Letter

Laura Laroche
Professor Young
ENGW 1101
1 May 2015
Revision Letter
            English has never been my forte because writing never came to me that easy. I never had a strong desire to learn grammatical errors, or even try to acknowledge the fragment errors I would make while writing. What I had learned in the past years of taking English is what I have brought with me to college and I certainly did not think I would need to improve my writing more than I already had done. But once I began English with Professor Young, I gradually started to change my writing techniques and enhanced certain areas that needed improvement to a more structured version than I previously knew. Throughout my spring semester’s English course, I definitely picked up tons of useful skills that I could put towards my writing process. Not only did I gain a better understanding of how an essay should be formatted, but by learning how I can redefine my writing, I began to enjoy the process much more because of the positive feedback I would receive.

            Like Professor Young stated in class, “clear writing equals good writing”, that the only way to succeed in writing an essay is by writing clearly and following the steps along the way to make sure what is being written makes sense or else it would not be understandable or just grammatically wrong. Whenever I got my essay back, there was always a lot of supportive feedback given to me to make sure I understood what flaws I had made and that they needed to fixed to achieve a higher grade. The feedback that was given allowed me to revise my writing in many different ways by using methods like the sandwich, SEER, or RENNS and to know better for the upcoming essays that were going to be assigned. Those methods that I have used had greatly improved my knowledge on how most formats, like providing quotes, needed to be placed in the essay without being mistaken. I will no doubt be using those types of procedures for many more essays to come my way because I found it much easier to use while writing. Having those kinds of quirky rules for writing in certain manners makes me appreciate writing a lot more because it becomes more comprehensible instead of being confused, then winging it, and receiving a low grade.

Thursday, April 23, 2015

Essay #2 Broken Silence

Laura Laroche
ENGW1101
Professor Young
3 March 2015
Essay 2
Broken Silence
          

Dr. Martin Luther King
speaking to the public during 
one of his famous speeches. (Crenshaw,  Para. 1)
  There is a time to be silent and a time where silence must be broken. Those times depend on the situation itself, what is going on around, and if it is appropriate to be silent or to speak up. Dr. Martin Luther King was an inspirational man who once wrote a speech called “Beyond Vietnam: A Time to Break Silence”. This speech was to make the world open its eyes, and realize that it is time for someone, like King, to speak out, “we must speak” (King Para. 4), about the attacks on the citizens of Vietnam. King decided to be the voice of the American citizens who could not speak when the attack was coming for them as well. In King’s speech, he stands up for others to let them know that he understands and wants to help. He spoke out to the world when it was needed because no one else would. When violence or suffering becomes part of our lives, it is necessary for someone to be brave, speak up, and break that silence. If someone needs help but no one does anything about it, it becomes appropriate to have a voice and reach out.
            A lot of people decide not to say anything because they believe that it is the right thing to do, or because they do not know how to handle the situation and allow other people to deal with it themselves. In that case, it shows that the public can sometimes be seen as cowards, and not realize that without them speaking out, a situation can go out of control. Breaking that silence should not be seen as something horrifying but more of a helpful voice that the world needs to hear. Without breaking the silence we will face the consequences that are truly wrong, as Martin Luther King said, “If we do not act, we shall surely be dragged down the long, dark, and shameful corridors of time reserved for those who possess power without compassion” (King Para. 12), those with more power will always make bad decisions and we will never be able to stop them. This is the reason why having a voice is important or else nothing right will be done.
            People all over the world have gone through rough changes where they were never able to speak up because they simply did not know how. Those people needed that one person to say something and reach out for them. They needed someone to listen to their situation and break that silence to help them. King brings up how the citizens of Vietnam were facing a time in need, where families were being attacked, “We have destroyed their two most cherished institutions: the family and the village” (King Para. 24), and no one did anything about it. King wanted the American citizens to realize that what was happening needed to be stopped because others were being tortured when they had nothing to do with the war. No one should have to go through tortures because of their race or what their country decides to do. Throughout history there were many times where certain people suffered and were left there to survive on their own.
            On December 7th, 1941, the Imperial Japanese Navy attacked Pearl Harbor where the United States naval base was located. The attack was intended to keep the United States from interfering with the military actions that the Japanese had towards them. Because of this attack, many Americans were afraid for their life, and decided that all Japanese were enemies, even Japanese-Americans who had nothing to do with these actions. They constructed a concentration camp base where about 120,000 Japanese-Americans residents were forced to live in “regardless of loyalty or citizenship” (History.com Staff Para. 3) because they were no longer trusted. Americans treated them so poorly that many could not survive and died in the living conditions they faced. This was so unfair, and wrong of America to do, “The relocation of Japanese-Americans into internment camps during World War II was one of the most flagrant violations of civil liberties in American history” (History.com Staff Para. 2), that no one at that time spoke up to help the Japanese-Americans. The President and government of America had such a big impact on their citizens that they thought what was going on was right. Those Japanese-Americans needed that voice to save them from a dark time but no one was there to break silence because they did not know how or just because they did not want to.
            King’s Speech still has relevance today, “we are one of the most conflict-prone nations in the past century” (Fischl Para. 2), we hear about other cruelty/starvation going on around the world, even in our own country, and we always try to stay out of their business, though we continue to speak about doing something but do nothing. His speech helps us know that being silent all the time does not help certain problems, like poverty, “the level of poverty in the nation changed little between 1970 and 200 and is much worse now” (Edelman Para. 10). There must be a person who is willing to speak up to reach out to others, to make the public understand that being silent is not always the best way to go. Martin Luther King wants us to be brave when times are tough and to have a voice to express what everyone else feels. He expresses, “our own inner being may be sensitive to its guidance, for we are deeply in need of a new way beyond the darkness that seems so close around us” (King Para. 4), that the voice will lead the public in making better decisions, and to understand what is going on around them.
            Poverty has consumed many countries, as well as America for many years. Many people have little or even no work continuously that lead them in much worse predicaments and tend to stay poor for generation after generation, “the percentage of people in deep poverty has doubled since 1976” (Edelman Para. 13). Those that face poverty need the silence to be broken once and for all because the situation will never be fixed. We allow the government to handle this but have yet to see a better outcome. If someone from the public decided to speak up for once and showed all those who are wealthy that they need to help those who are poor, there might be a huge decrease in poverty. But it could only be done by a voice from the public. We must help each other to achieve greatness. We must break silence for others to live a better life.
            Breaking Silence lets us speak out, let others know our opinions, and maybe choose a different direction on certain situations. Usually those who speak out have a reason to. Those reasons are caused by a serious outcome, like for instance the Vietnam War. When there are serious problems going on around the world, and what the country chooses to do is not right, that is when someone needs to say something. Like how we face poverty everyday but the government has not done anything about it, someone needs to say something to change that and get rid of poverty. Saying what needs to be said puts a light on that problem and allows the public to fight for a different outcome. We believe that if a government decides to do something, we, the people, should never interfere because they have higher authority. Like King states in his speech, “men do not easily assume the task of opposing their government’s policy, especially in time of war” (King Para. 3), we are afraid to speak against the government’s policy and choose to not say anything. But there comes a time where the government’s actions are wrong and only the people can stop it by speaking up.
            Overall being silent, or choosing to break silence should never be seen as bad thing. It is one’s decision to choose to say something or not. And of course there are times that are better to keep quiet. No one should feel forced to say anything if the time is not right. But Dr. Martin Luther King chose to have a voice that will impact other’s thoughts; he believed that speaking out during the beginning of the Vietnam War was definitely an appropriate time. His speech allowed others to think and have a voice as well to lead the nation in a better direction. Breaking silence is very necessary to help others in need in times of suffering and violence, no one should be left behind.









Works Cited
Edelman, Peter. “The State of Poverty in America.” Prospect.org. The American Prospect. 22 June
2012. Web. 5 April 2015.
Fischl, Jack. “Martin Luther King Jr. 3 Powerful Speeches That Are Still Relevant Today.” Policy.Mic. Jack Fischl. 15 January 2013. Web. 4 April 2015.
King, Martin Luther Jr. “Beyond Vietnam: A Time to Break Silence.” Clergy and Laymen Concerned About Vietnam. Riverside Church, New York City. 4 April 1967. Lecture.
Staff, History.com. “Japanese-American Relocation.” History.com. A + E Networks. 2009. Web. 4    
                      April 2015.


Thursday, March 26, 2015

Pursuit of Freedom

Laura Laroche
17 February 2014 
Professor Young
Essay 1: Freedom, Final Draft           

  The Pursuit of Freedom
Having freedom is what allows a person of any race or gender to show his/her creative side without having a higher authority telling him/her otherwise. In the past, slaves were unable to express their inner self, and constantly had someone telling the slaves what to do, with force. In The Good Lord Bird, the author James McBride introduced two completely different characters that have different levels of freedom, Sibonia and Pie. Sibonia comes off as a harsh, crazy woman who does not seem to have it together but she gets to say what is on her mind. Then there is Pie who has privileges, but is treated with no respect. Being free is the ability to express oneself and having control on our own actions, and Sibonia has that ability, she is freer. Considering from the characteristics that McBride gave Sibonia, being able to say what she wants, Sibonia has much more freedom than most slaves, especially Pie.
It is obviously expected that no one wants to be labeled as mentally ill, but in this case, it is exactly what Sibonia wanted. Most people want to avoid a person who is perceived as “crazy”. Onion notices that Sibonia went from acting foolish to completely normal in seconds, “She had brushed the madness off her face the way you’d brush a fly away” (McBride 164). Before she changed her actions, Onion assumed right away that she was not at all together in the head and he wanted to get away from her. Being crazy is the identity that Sibonia uses around people she views as authority to be left alone. She wants to hide her intelligence from those who might take it away from her. Faking is what she uses as an advantage to get ahead like planning a fight against the white, “They was planning on killing white families by the hundreds, including the town minister” (Onion, 173). Sibonia is one of the most courageous, boldest, and smartest characters in the novel that once you get to know her, it is easy to tell like Onion could, “her eyes glaring at me was strong and calm as the clean barrel of a double-barreled shotgun boring down at my face. There was power in that face” (McBride 164). Her intelligence is what allows her to represent herself as mentally ill and knowing if she does so, she has a good chance of getting away with whatever she does.
On the other hand, Pie is known as a whore. A whore is a woman who sells her body and mind for money. A woman who does such a thing is far from being free. All the men Pie has been with have a power over her by sleeping with her. She will always be known for her body and nothing else. Pie’s beauty is the only reason men want to sleep with her, not for her personality or even her thoughts. When Onion first met her, right away he noticed her beauty instead of her personality, “bundle of beauty coming down them stairs that first time” (McBride 144). Pie sleeps with men not only for money but also to get special treatment from the whites. Onion describes his and Pie’s living, “Your meals is free. Your roof is paid for” (158), as the special treatment that they get for following Abby’s order or any other white authority. The things Pie must go through to be treated differently from slaves is far from being free, “Pie was the busiest whore on the Hot Floor” (Onion, 170). She rather be used for sex than doing manual labor which shows she has no respect for herself. The beauty Pie has is what allows her to be controlled by others around her and she does not even realize it because she lets them control her.
 Going back to Sibonia, she is known for being a slave and only that. She has no privileges and the whites do not care for her. That gives Sibonia time to herself and since she is not being watched, it allows her to say and do anything she wants without consequences. Sibonia should not envy the privileges that the others get in the house because she knows that is not freedom. Being outside the house, in the pen, allows Sibonia and the others to have more freedom with their actions. They are never being watched and certainly none of the white fellows take their time to see what is going on in the pen. All the main focus happens in the house, which allows Sibonia to be freer by making plans and having actions of her own without anyone on the outside noticing.
Then comes Pie again, and she is being taken away from the true feeling of freedom by having privileges given to her. Pie has privileges that make her believe that she has freedom when it is the other way around. Her believing so causes Pie to act as if she has more authority over the other slaves and sees herself as more of a “white” person than a slave. The privileges that she has, “Miss Abby gived her the run of the place, let her choose her own customers more or less, and live as she wanted” (Onion, 159), have such a great power over her that she follows what is being said without thinking otherwise. Like Pie mentions, “You let Miss Abby work you. She might work you to death…She can do whatever she wants” (154). Having those luxuries allows Abby to control Pie and all her actions. Pie has an extent to her decision-making and they all must please Abby, “Pie was her main attraction” (Onion, 158). Pie is being watched at all time. Others might feel like she has more freedom because of all the things she gets but she does not do it because it pleases her, she does it because it is the only way for her to fit in and be treated somewhat free, but that will never be the case.
Overall, Sibonia definitely proves to have more freedom than Pie will ever have. She is a bright character throughout the novel and has it her way. Freedom is what allows a person to be express oneself like Sibonia does. Freedom should not be seen as just a privilege but more of a control that a person has on their self and no one else. It is about independence a person has without needing help from others. Sibonia has that independence, the chance to do whatever she pleases without being imprisoned or even judged by higher authority. Throughout each slave, some were treated differently with privileges that others did not have. In The Good Lord Bird, Pie had those privileges that slaves desired for years but she never got the possibility of better treatment. Even though slaves desired privileges, it will never be greater than freedom. Sibonia had more than privileges she had freedom.







Works Cited
McBride, James. The Good Lord Bird. New York: Penguin Group, 2013. Print.